高校自由英作文解答例

 

テーマ

Divorce should never be accepted to end a marriage.

 

生徒の答案

I don’t agree with this topic. If divorce were never accepted, there would be serious problems.

Actually, my parents are thinking divorce and I can agree with their divorce. Though I think it’s happy for my family to live together peacefully, it seems better for my parents to divorce.

Now I’m not a little child, so I can live with either of my parents and occasionally see another one.

  Relationships can change as time passes. It is true that its best to live with one wife or hasbund through one’s life. However, in fact, it’s not so easy. Of course divorce shouldn’t be accepted so easily, but with the agreement between both sides in which sufficient discussion results.

 

ネイティブアメリカ人と日本人講師による添削後

  I don’t agree with the idea. If divorce were never accepted, there would be serious problems.

  Actually, my parents are thinking about divorce and I can agree with their divorce. Though I would be happy if my family was to live together peacefully, it seems better for my parents to divorce.

Now, I’m not a little child, so I can live with either of my parents and occasionally see the other one.

  Relationships can change as time passes. It is true that its best to live with one wife or husband through one’s life. However, in fact, it’s not so easy. Of course divorce shouldn’t be accepted so easily, but with the agreement between both sides in which sufficient discussion results.

 

 

テーマ

People live longer now, so the normal retirement age should be raised to 70.

 

生徒の答案

I don’t agree with this topic. It is true that now people can live longer than ever. However, old people are not as strong and healthy as younger people. If people at the age of 70 worked the same as the younger, they would have great difficulty, as a result, would get sick.

  I think the time after retirement should be devoted to leisure. If people had to continue working until 70, they couldn’t have enough time to do their hobby, to be with their family and to reflect their own life. Imagine how hard to accept your own death before you get ready for it.

 

ネイティブアメリカ人と日本人講師による添削後

I don’t agree with this statement. It is true that now people can live longer than ever. However, old people are not as strong and healthy as young people. If people worked at the age of 70 in the same way as the young do, they would have great difficulty, and as a result, would get sick.

  I think the time after retirement should be devoted to leisure. If people had to continue working until the age of 70, they couldn’t have enough time to do their hobbies, to be with their families and to reflect on their own life. Imagine how hard to accept your own death before you get ready for it.